Friday 17 August 2007

Almost but not nearly a Poem

We have not gone, we two.
It's just we've been away,
Dave working in the dark,
Pete by a pebbly bay.

A sure entrant for most dire poem of the month

3 comments:

Pauline said...

well now, it rhymes, it has rhythm, it imparts information in a clever way, and it's not prose - I'd say you've writ a poem

Canbush said...

Ah, Pauline, but feel its shallowness.

Pauline said...

I missed it - I like the feel of the two of you off on individual pursuits but still here, do you see?